mardi 13 décembre 2011

FINAL WRITING TEST

OF MICE AND MEN

The Great Depression, a worldwide economic recession, occurred during the decade preceding World War II. In John Steinbeck’s novel Of Mice and Men, the characters of George and Lennie are trying to improve their lives during that period of time. This story appears to be a metaphor for people’s pursuit of happiness during the Great Depression. Consequently, the lack of jobs in the cities, the life on the road, the individual struggle for survival as well as the unreachable dreams are the themes that are brought up in the aforementioned novel.

            First of all, George and Lennie work on ranches rather than in the cities. This is due to the fact that, because of the economic crisis, the city-dwellers are forced to leave their jobs. In fact, this crisis was stimulated by overproduction, meaning that people do not have enough money to consume everything that was produced then. Therefore, the economy slowed down and by doing so, people started losing their employment. Their only way to survive was to head to the countryside and live from agriculture and at least be able to feed themselves. This scenario is similar to Of Mice and Men’s where the characters are in the identical situation. For instance, George and Lennie never consider leaving the rural regions and try to find a job where they can get something to eat, a place to stay in and a salary on top of that, something that they would not necessary get elsewhere. Throughout the story, George insists that Lennie does not get himself in trouble, so that they don’t lose their only source of income. Moreover, they had to work hard because they knew that they could lose their place anytime. To sum up, because of the precariousness of the only jobs left in the countryside, keeping it is a necessity in order to be happy.

Secondly, in the 1930s, people are leaving their homes and head towards a new place, hoping to improve their lives. This is what we call the life on the road. This period of time coincides with Dust Bowl, a period of severe dust storms causing the American Great plains to be infertile. This phenomenon was caused by drought and decades of intense farming. As a consequence, the Great plains’ farmers are forced to migrate and most of them head to California, a state that is perceived as a promised land because of its long growing season. In addition, let us be reminded that the city-dwellers also choose the countryside as their destination, meaning there are twice as much people on the road. As a matter of fact, George and Lennie are as well a part of this migrating movement. However, their motives are not the same as the others’. They are forced to travel from a farm to another since Lennie has a mental condition that makes him do bad actions. These mischiefs are the main reason why these two men always end up being chased from where they work. For example, in Weed, the farm they previously worked at, Lennie tried to feel the softness a little girl’s dress by touching it. Nevertheless, this little girl screamed and claimed that she had been raped. When this event is described, George says: "The guys in Weed start a party out to lynch Lennie. [...]  An’ that night we scrammed outa there.” In brief, just like the migrant workers, the two protagonists live on the road, running after a better life.

Then, during that period of time, it is so difficult to survive, that people cannot afford caring for the other ones too; it is everyone for themselves. Like mentioned before, everyone’s main concern is trying to get through these hard times. Therefore, friendship is not one of people’s priorities. Their every parcel of energy is needed in order to survive. Even in Of Mice and Men, it is suspicious for two men to travel together. As an example, when they see them arrive, the people who are already working at the ranch immediately assume that George is taking advantage of Lennie. It shows that it is an uncommon thing for migrant farmers to care about each other. Geroge proves it when he says: “Guys like us, that work on ranches, are the loneliest guys in the world.” Another symbol of that is the fact that the town that they come working in is named Soledad, which means solitude in Spanish. To conclude, this story says that whenever there is an economic crisis, working and trying to survive is everyone’s main concern.

Finally, in Of Mice and Men and during the Great Depression, the only things that people can hold on to are their dreams. In fact, the aforesaid Great plains’ farmers traveled to California with ideas of prosperity and opportunity in mind. These thoughts gave them hope and kept them going. On the other hand, George and Lennie, dream of having their own farm and “live off the fatta the lan’”, and when they cannot eat anything, they can at least feed upon it. It is especially important for Lennie who says: “Go on, George! Tell about what we’re gonna have in the garden and about the rabbits in the cages and about the rain in the winter and the stove, and how thick the cream is on the milk like you can hardly cut it.” The characters are seduced by the idealistic life it would offer them, just like the American dream. Yet, their dream is unreachable as well as the Great plains’ farmers’. Indeed, California does not appear to be the land they thought it was and the two main characters will never be able to find enough money to achieve their plan. Crooks even cruelly tells it in the following quote: “You won’t get no land. I seen too many guys with land in their head. They never get none under their hand.” In summary, hope could only be found in people’s aspirations, even though they can never be fulfilled.

In conclusion, people’s struggles during their pursuit of happiness is metaphorically shown in Of Mice and Men by the means of the characters who are perpetually searching for a job, living on the road, self-centered and trying to achieve the impossible American dream. Unfortunately, the people of America had to wait until the Second World War to see the economy getting back from where it fell from.
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Plan

PLAN

INTRODUCTION:
1) Attention grabber: definition of the Great Depression (The Great Depression is a worldwide economical recession that occurred during the decade preceding World War II. In John Steinbeck’s novel Of Mice and Men, the characters of George and Lennie are trying to improve their lives during that period of time.)
2) Thesis statement:  The said novel appears to be a metaphor for people’s pursuit of happiness during the Great Depression through the:
- Lack of jobs in the cities/the Dust Bowl
- Life on the road
- Individual struggle for survival
- Unreachable dreams

DEVELOPMENT:
1) Topic sentence: First of all, George and Lennie work on ranches rather than in the cities.
Details: This section contains an explanation of people’s situation during Great Depression and the perpetual vicious circle of production, as well as the link with the characters. It contrasts they way people lived in the cities and in the rural regions.  
Summary: In fact, because of the precariousness of the working conditions, finding an alternative source of income is a necessity in order to be happy.
2) Topic sentence: Secondly, in the 1930s, people are leaving their homes and head towards a new place, hoping to improve their lives.
Details: This section will discuss the motivations behind the migrations (no jobs and Dust Bowl) and will make a link with Lennie’s situation that forces the characters to live on the road (example of the girl’s dress in Weed).

Quote: "The guys in Weed start a party out to lynch Lennie. [...]  An’ that night we scrammed outa there.”
Summary: In brief, just like the migrant workers, the two protagonists live on the road, running after a better life.
3) Topic sentence: Then, during that period of time, it is so difficult to survive, that people cannot afford caring for the other ones too; it’s everyone for themselves.
Details: This section describes how survival is predominant, and how it’s everyone for themselves. It includes a link with the characters of Of Mice and Men (except for George and Lennie). Soledad, the city where they are, means solitude in Spanish. Two guys who travel together seems suspect to the characters who were already working at the ranch.
Quote:
Summary: Briefly, during that period of time, it was so difficult to survive, that people could not afford caring for the other ones too.
4)Topic sentence: Finally, in Of Mice and Men and during the Great Depression, the only things that people can hold on to are their dreams.
Details: This section will include a comparison between the American dream and Lennie’s dream of having their own farm. Both of them hide the same motives: hope, something to cling onto. Its inaccessibility will be discussed: the American dream as well as the farm (Crook’s quote). The other characters’ dreams will be enumerated and the way they are impossible will be described.
Quotes:1) “you won’t get no land. I seen too many guys with land in their head. They never get none under their hand.”
           2) “Go on, George! Tell about what we’re gonna have in the garden and about the rabbits in the cages and about the rain in the winter and the stove, and how thick the cream is on the milk like you can hardly cut it. Tell about that, George.”
Summary: In summary, hope could only be found in people’s aspirations, even though they can never be fulfilled.
CONCLUSION:
1) Summary: In conclusion, people’s struggles during their reach for happiness is metaphorically shown in Of Mice and Men by the means of the characters who are perpetually searching for a job, living on the road, self-centered and trying to achieve the impossible American dream.
2) Opening: Consider it fortunate or not, it is indeed the Second World War that put the economy back on its feet and stimulated the employment.
SOURCES:
1) CLIFFS NOTES. Of Mice and Men, [online], [http://www.cliffsnotes.com/study_guide/literature/Of-Mice-and-Men-Of-Mice-and-Men-at-a-Glance.id-101.html], (Consulted on November 26th, 2011).
2) E NOTES. Of Mice and Men, [online], [http://www.enotes.com/of-mice-and-men], (Consulted on November 26th, 2011).
3) WOODLAWNHS. The Great Depression, [online], [http://woodlawnhs.bcps.org/greatdepression.html], (Consulted on November 26th, 2011).




dimanche 27 novembre 2011

Revising and Editing

Scores:

Pre-test: 38/50
Lesson 2: 53/60
Lesson 3: 16/18
Lesson 4: 17/21
Lesson 5: 4/4
Lesson 6: 8/10
Lesson 7: 23/25
Lesson 8: 16/20
Lesson 10: 12/15
Lesson 13 : 14/14
Lesson 15 : 5/10
Post-test : 46/50

Effectiveness :

Unfortunately, I feel like I didn’t improve much my writing skills, partly because I didn’t spend much time reviewing my assignments and working on improving it and partly because we never corrected our homework (writing work and grammar work) in class so consequently, I wasn’t always sure if my answers were accurate.      

Things learned :

This course was very enlightening for me as far as literature goes. We read few short stories, poems and even saw and read a playwright. We also learned a lot about different authors, periods that they lived in and genres. This allowed me to enlarge my general knowledge regarding American and Canadian literature. However, I’m not quite sure if I learned anything new as far as writing goes. Thought-out this semester, I found myself using things like structure, literary elements and ways to start an introduction that I previously learned in high-school.   

Appreciation:

What I liked the most about this course is the fact that we mainly read stories from 19th and 20th century writers. This is due to the fact that older authors as well as their stories don’t really interest me mostly because of the old style English. In addition, it allowed us to discover stories that can still relate to our present lives. I also liked analysing these stories in class and listening to its different interpretations even though it wasn’t necessarily a part of this course’s programme. On the other hand, what I “liked less” about this class was the unit about poetry simply because I can’t seem to appreciate this form of literature, not even in songs.

Course rating :

During this semester, my evaluations were always done on time, I only missed one day of classes and always read carefully every single one of the short stories, playwrights and poems that were due.  However, I feel like I didn’t always give my 100% and as they say, there is always room for improvement! For instance, sometimes, I could have paid more attention in class; I could have done my writing work and grammar work more attentively and I could have given more effort towards the evaluations that I did (especially projects and our writing assignment). For the aforementioned reasons, I would give myself a 6,5/10.   

jeudi 10 novembre 2011

Revising and Editing 1

1. What I liked most about my text is ... 
First paragraph

2. What I liked least about my text is ...
Conclusion

Here are my suggestions for improving the:

3. introduction 

I should have used one of the 11 ways to introduce an essay that we learned in class. 


4. thesis statement 
I should bring up my subject in a more creative way.

5. topic sentence of each paragraph 
I can look up for previous examples to make sure that my topic sentences contain everything. 

6. content of the text 
Unfortunately, I have a bad habit of not doing a plan before writing. That technique might help me to improve my paragraph's content. 


7. organization of the text 
I believe that my text is well organized, except for the conclusion since I didn't write a thesis statement. 


9. sentence style of the text 
I might use every now and then a figure of speech. 

10. vocabulary 
I could highlight the words that I often use in my text and try to find synonyms in a Thesaurus.
11. grammar 
Unfortunately, I didn't get any feedback on my grammar. Consequently, I'm not sure just yet whether it needs improvement or not.

12. spelling
Rereading my text and looking for some of the words in a dictionary.

13. conclusion 
My conclusion was the weakest link in my text because it lacks a thesis statement. Writing one the next time, would of course improve my mark. 

jeudi 6 octobre 2011

You don`t always become what you eat

                                       Written by Stephen Leacock, The New Food is a short story about a Professor that has invented a highly concentrated form of food in the form of pellets. As a story goes on, a baby that goes by the name of Gustavus Adolphus swallows one of these pills and explodes into fragments. This short story’s style differs a lot from another short story called Old Habits Die Hard. These differences become more obvious once we analyze these short stories` characters, dialogues, word order and sentence types.  
  
                                        First of all, contrary to Old Habits Die Hard, The New Food`s character`s interact with each other which fleshes them out, ads more action into the story itself and provides us a break from long monotonous descriptions. In fact, not only The New Food`s characters actually have names, such as Plumb, Henry, Gustavus Adolphus, but they also communicate with each other through dialogues in paragraphs five and six. On the other hand, in Old Habits Die Hard, the Old woman and the old man don’t have any names and don’t even say a word through the whole story. To sum up, The New Food differs from Old Habits Die Hard in virtue of its characters and their interactions.

                                        In addition, The New Food`s sentence`s type is simple and contains a regular structure (subject, verb, complement) which makes it easier and pleasant to read. Meanwhile, Old Habits Die Hard has a very different style. For instance, it contains one-word sentences such as “Bedlam. Bedpan. Bedrgaggled. Bedfast.” Also, some of the other`s sentence`s word order is very complex and sometimes hard to understand. For example, “Old man in white gown” doesn’t have a verb among many other sentences. In brief, word order and sentence structure are very different in these short stories, one is read with ease and the other is hard to read.

                                        All things considered, the style of Leacock’s story differs from that of Silvera because of Leacock’s characters that happen to be more elaborated, dialogues, word order and sentence types.    
                                       

mercredi 7 septembre 2011

Opinion about The Tell-Tale Heart


What I really like about The Tell-Tale Heart is the fact that the main character’s motivations are mostly dictated by his feelings and senses.  Therefore, when we read the story, we don’t have to engage in analysing and interpreting its character’s actions (since his actions are irrational) which makes it a really pleasant reading experience.

Wiki Quiz

  1. Where is Mr. B's office? C-150
  2. What percentage of the course is writing and speaking worth? 80%
  3. How many items are on the "Writing Correction Code"? 18 items
  4. What are Mr. B's office hours? Tuesdays: 11:30 - 2:30, Wednesdays 1:00 - 2:00 and Thursdays 3:00 - 4:00
  5. What is the 48 hour rule? When a student is planning on being absent during an evaluation, he has 48 hours to notify his teacher. Otherwise, this student is going to fail his evaluation.
  6. What is the first assignment? Interview one of the student's and write a blog about it.
  7. How many references are made to "thesis statement"? 13 references
  8. How can I reach Mr. B? Via MIO and e-mail (francis.bonkowski54@gmail.com)
  9. How many short stories are we going to read? 3 short stories
  10. How many pages on the site refer to "grammar"? Unfortunately, I couldn't find any!
  11. How many items are listed in the Student Agreement? 10 items
  12. What are the summative writing assignments? Assignments that are going to count in our final mark. 
  13. Write down two questions you have about the course?

    1 - As far as litterature goes, are we going to study any modern novels?
  14. 2 - What would be the main advantage of taking the 103A English course while other English courses are worth the same amount of credits ?